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Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the increasing
population
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 in cities and towns, many countries are now building numerous outdoor places for
the
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society. Many
people
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 think that it is essential for urban areas around the globe to invest immensely in creating huge outdoor
spaces
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 for the
population
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. In my opinion, it indeed is crucial to invest in it though I wouldn’t say heavily, but a moderate
amount
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that is
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 sufficient for the surroundings and the
people
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.
This
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 essay will explicate the reasons we need to spend on exterior public
spaces
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 and why making a heavy investment is not necessary.
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 with, due to the high
population
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 in cities, many
people
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 live in small apartments with no garden
spaces
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 which is becoming the cause of many health diseases.
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 to that, more the
population
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 leads to more air pollution degrading the environment. Due to
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, it is important to build outdoor
spaces
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 like community parks, and recreational
spaces
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 where
people
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 can experience fresh air, meet the community and participate in various amusement activities.
Although
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 investment in outdoor areas is essential, spending an enormous
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 is unnecessary
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, a sensible
amount
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 that benefits living beings and the environment should be used.
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, building a huge water fountain can be replaced with a pond. The fountain would cost a lot of money and waste water while a pond will help to maintain the natural habitat for many birds. So while building social outdoor
spaces
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, it is not necessary to invest heavily in things that don’t bring any good but just the right
amount
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 that fulfils the purpose. To summarize, it is of utmost importance to build large outdoor community parks for cities and towns to maintain a good quality of life for their residents and a healthy environment.
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, it can be done with a moderate
amount
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 of money and resources if used wisely.
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