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in this modern world, average life expectancy is increasing. what problems will this cause for individuals and society? suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of aging populations.

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this
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 modern epoch, the average life
expectation
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 of an individual has increased because of the latest development.
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 article will discuss the increasing
number
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 of retired and the ageing
population
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 as
problems
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then
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 describe extending
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retirement
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the retirement
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age
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standard
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standards
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 and strengthening the
healthcare
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 sector as
solutions
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. The
problems
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 are the increasing
number
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 of retired and the ageing
population
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. When
people
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 tend to live longer, their desire causes
increasing
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an increasing
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number
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 of retired
people
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 for governments to support. Due to the
issue
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government
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 budgets feel pressure.
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,
high
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a high
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number
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 of retired
people
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put
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 budgetary pressure on
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government
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the government
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 as a whole because
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government
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the government
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 have to pay pensions to them. The
second
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 problem is
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an aging
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aging
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ageing
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population
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. The
aging
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 of the
population
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 affects the demand for all
health
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care
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 services, including hospitals, and long-term
care
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. The elderly
people
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 will have had a lot of
health
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 issues by the end of their 70s.
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, there are certain
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 conditions that are expected to be a challenge to
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health
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care
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 system with the increasing
aging
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ageing
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population
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. These conditions include cancer, dementia,
increase
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an increase
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 in the
number
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 of falls, and diabetes. The
solutions
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 are extending
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retirement
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the retirement
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age
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 standard and strengthening the
healthcare
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 sector. Raising the
retirement
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age
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 may positively influence economic chaos due to
crisis
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the crisis
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 of paying
pension
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pensions
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 to retired
people
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. Delaying
retirement
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 is expected to restore partially the financial balance of the pension system.
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, when
people
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 are living longer can continue working for years and the process of paying
pension
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their pension
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 will be postponed. The
aging
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ageing
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population
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 can bring a lot of
health
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 issues for the old
people
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 and
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health
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the health
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care
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 system. There
are
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majority
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the majority
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 of
solutions
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 for improving
healthcare
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 to overcome
aging
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ageing
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population
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problems
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.
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, improving medical, nursing and technical education as well as training of existing manpower to support the elderly can be beneficial. In conclusion, due to
increase
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of
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 life
expectancy
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,expectancy
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 the
problems
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 are the increasing
number
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 of retired and the ageing
population
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. The
solutions
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 are extending
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retirement
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the retirement
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age
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 standard and strengthening the
healthcare
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 sector. By extending the
age
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 of
retirement
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 and strengthening the
health
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care
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 systems
government
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 will be able to overcome the issues rose by
enhancement
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the enhancement
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 of life expectancy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average life expectancy
  • developed world
  • increase
  • individuals
  • society
  • personal goals
  • ambitions
  • quality of life
  • leisure
  • recreation
  • healthcare costs
  • challenges
  • healthcare system
  • ageing population
  • shortage
  • available workers
  • economy
  • retirement planning
  • healthy lifestyles
  • investing
  • social support systems
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