in this modern world, average life expectancy is increasing. what problems will this cause for individuals and society? suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of aging populations.
In
this
modern epoch, the average life expectation
of an individual has increased because of the latest development. Replace the word
expectancy
This
article will discuss the increasing number
of retired and the ageing population
as problems
then
describe extending retirement
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the retirement
age
standard
and strengthening the Fix the agreement mistake
standards
healthcare
sector as solutions
.
The problems
are the increasing number
of retired and the ageing population
. When people
tend to live longer, their desire causes increasing
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an increasing
the increasing
number
of retired people
for governments to support. Due to the issue
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,issue
government
budgets feel pressure. For instance
, high
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a high
the high
number
of retired people
put
budgetary pressure on Correct subject-verb agreement
puts
government
as a whole because Add an article
the government
government
have to pay pensions to them. The Add an article
the government
second
problem is Add an article
an aging
the aging
aging
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ageing
population
. The aging
of the Change the spelling
ageing
population
affects the demand for all health
care
services, including hospitals, and long-term care
. The elderly people
will have had a lot of health
issues by the end of their 70s. For example
, there are certain health
conditions that are expected to be a challenge to health
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the health
care
system with the increasing aging
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ageing
population
. These conditions include cancer, dementia, increase
in the Correct article usage
an increase
number
of falls, and diabetes.
The solutions
are extending retirement
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the retirement
age
standard and strengthening the healthcare
sector. Raising the retirement
age
may positively influence economic chaos due to crisis
of paying Correct article usage
the crisis
pension
to retired Fix the agreement mistake
pensions
people
. Delaying retirement
is expected to restore partially the financial balance of the pension system. For instance
, when people
are living longer can continue working for years and the process of paying pension
will be postponed. The Correct pronoun usage
their pension
aging
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ageing
population
can bring a lot of health
issues for the old people
and health
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the health
care
system. There are
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is
majority
of Add an article
the majority
a majority
solutions
for improving healthcare
to overcome aging
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ageing
population
problems
. For example
, improving medical, nursing and technical education as well as training of existing manpower to support the elderly can be beneficial.
In conclusion, due to increase
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the increase
of
life Change preposition
in
expectancy
the Add a comma
,expectancy
problems
are the increasing number
of retired and the ageing population
. The solutions
are extending retirement
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the retirement
age
standard and strengthening the healthcare
sector. By extending the age
of retirement
and strengthening the health
care
systems government
will be able to overcome the issues rose by enhancement
of life expectancy.Correct article usage
the enhancement
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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