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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back.

#restaurant #manager #money
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to tell you about the most annoying experience that I had at your Hotel Newcera
last
 Sunday and want a refund of my money. At the onset, it was my birthday so I booked
second
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 floor of the restaurant for a small
get together
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.
However
, my guests and I had to wait for more than one and
half
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hour
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 because the floor was not prepared for the party.
In addition
, the cuisines were terrible in taste, some of these were too salty
especially
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in
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butter chicken,
the
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 meat was not fresh. After
this
 horrible party, three of my guests suffered from severe stomach pain.
Therefore
, being a regular customer, I did not anticipate
such
 a bad service from your side.
Hence
, I require a full refund of my booking amount which was $300 plus special decoration charges of $35. If you are not ready to pay my money back, a legal discourse against you will be followed
by
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me. I hope you would understand the genuinity of my situation and act
accordingly
. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Harry Brown
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