In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Advanced and progressive system in farming is being grown. Even though ,yet, inhabitants of some countries around the world suffer from
food
deprivation.
That is
for many reasons
such
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sudden
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increase in dwellers throughout the world and farmland
are
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not enough to satisfy people's
food
demand. 47 Starvation has always
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sparked
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considerable debate by those who are under occupation Around that. Meanwhile ,two major problems are being spread encountered concerned with going Hungry.
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,in
developed
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society they always focus on their own country's progress in every
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and
thus
, we can see extravagant sources which could be allocated to the communities Where
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living in poverty.
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,
such
as
a
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wasteful use of natural sources like water in
advanced
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society . So it can bother other
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living suitably.
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,
agriculture
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land under cultivation
are
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faced with limitation due to population
inlargment
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enlargement
growth and their demand for
food
. Now, two major problems for
food
deprivation as mentioned above have to
considered
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by Political will , government co-operation and
likewise
people.
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of all, authorities'
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around
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starvation in countries must appear forcefully. It means
thatin
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that in
that
other words,
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launching
campaign
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for
this
problem means
lack
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of
food
in some parts of the world, creating
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with
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topic
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their social media, or rising raising public awareness by giving
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concerned with
food
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problem
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problems
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in both schools and Universities.
Moreover
, land under cultivation as
it
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mentioned previously
are
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encountered
restriction
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on
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crop
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crops
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.
Although
, a good proposal could be submitted in
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future as vertical farming. Which is the
the
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practice of growing
crop
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in vertically stacked layers. With
this
method, we expect increasing crop yields which
is
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accompanied
with
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by a smaller unit area of land requirement. And
therefore
, it results in more
food
and production. In conclusion,
although
we can deal with
such
problems and come up with new ideas, people, on the other
sidehand
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side hand
side and
, play an important role(sing count.)
to
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care about not being extravagant
wasteful
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and wasteful
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with resources and consuming them more efficiently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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