Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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worldwide. With automation, we can
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more and more. The question is developments in healthy, educations and
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business
are major for the improvement of poorer
countries
.
However
, the governments of richer
countries
must take more
responsibilities
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for
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assisting
assessing
the poorer
countries
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terms of the positive side, the governments of richer
countries
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more charity for the poorer states,
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of
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countries
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charity
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for poorer societies. The main reason given to support
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claim is that
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Kingdom is make take care
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these
people
for a long time. they give theme freedom for makes these poorer
people
to
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work, when they
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are staying for 10 years the government give them the nationality.
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, several states
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did not give freedom
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poorer communities because they
thing is
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loses money when to
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assistance
poorer
communties
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communities
. To sum up,
although
it makes some
countries
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money the poor
people
are give
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lesson
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in
this
life, I suppose poor societies are making essential for
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Therefore
I believe that I prefer
this
country who are taking
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for poorer
communties
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communities
rather than did not
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interested
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poorer
people
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Developmental aid
  • Global solidarity
  • Economic disparity
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable development
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Governmental intervention
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • Foreign aid dependency
  • Institutional support
  • Global economy
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Neocolonialism
  • Bilateral agreements
  • Multilateral organizations
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