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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#improvements #health #education #trade #development #nations #governments #responsibilities #areas
There is no doubt that these days, the future has
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worldwide. With automation, we can
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 more and more. The question is developments in healthy, educations and
buisness
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business
 are major for the improvement of poorer
countries
.
However
, the governments of richer
countries
 must take more
responsibilities
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 for
asissting
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assisting
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countries
 in
such
 areas. In
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 terms of the positive side, the governments of richer
countries
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 more charity for the poorer states,
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of
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countries
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charity
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 for poorer societies. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that
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 Kingdom is make take care
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 these
people
 for a long time. they give theme freedom for makes these poorer
people
to
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work, when they
they
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are staying for 10 years the government give them the nationality.
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, several states
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did not give freedom
for
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 poorer communities because they
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 loses money when to
asisstance
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assistance
 poorer
communties
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communities
. To sum up,
although
 it makes some
countries
loses
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 money the poor
people
are give
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lesson
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 in
this
 life, I suppose poor societies are making essential for
those country
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.
Therefore
 I believe that I prefer
this
 country who are taking
responsibilities
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 for poorer
communties
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communities
 rather than did not
intersted
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interested
of
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 poorer
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Developmental aid
  • Global solidarity
  • Economic disparity
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable development
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Governmental intervention
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • Foreign aid dependency
  • Institutional support
  • Global economy
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Neocolonialism
  • Bilateral agreements
  • Multilateral organizations
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