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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Other say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Disucss both these view and give your own opinions.

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Nowasday, technology has changed rapidly in a decade. Most
people
 can consider to
use
 their smartphone sand or tablets to watch films or go to
cinema
 to enjoy their
movies
. We would like to discuss these two different perspectives in the below paragraph. During the pandemic,
people
 are forcesd to choose to have their entertainment at home. Because of using of smartphone to watch
movies
 via Netflix, youtube and Disney Plus. It give us more flexible to consider our times priority without any time constraint.
Thus
,
people
 get
use
 have Netflix or youtube. In modern cities, most
people
 might need to work in long working hours, which create certain of difficulty to go to
cinema
. While they have times to go the
cinema
, the
movies
 could not be on show anymore because of
movies
 might only be on show around 1 month.
Therefore
,
people
 prefer to
use
 their smartphone to watch some
movies
 during their travelling time without any time constaint.
On the other hand
,
people
 might prefer to see movie in a
cinema
. I do agree that some
movies
 might need to go to
cinema
. Because of
cinema
 provides better equipment including bigger screen, surround sound equipment and 4D
movies
 that provides a better experience to enjoy their
movies
. The experience that cannot compare with watching
movies
 via tablet.
For example
: I might prefer to go to
cinema
 to watch active
movies
.
Such
 as: Spiderman, Superman. Going to the
cinema
 that can make you feel more exictment. In my perspective, going to
cinema
 might be kind of mixture consideration
that is
 depending on the nature of
movies
, times constaint. Personally, I would prefer to
use
 tablet to watch some love story and I will still go to
cinema
 to enjoy action
movies
 that can give me a few hours break and relax from our daily life.
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