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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
people
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 are really mobilised to consider where they lives. Some
people
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 might prefer to live close when they were born. We illitrate ireasons, advanages and disadvantages in the below pragraph. Most
people
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 decide to have their own houses, we might normally consider the
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 or location that we are familiar with. Because of
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, considering the living areas to where we were born will become one of considerations. Living in a familiar
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, which would have certain of advantages and disadvantages. From pro perspective, we will be fully aware the neighborhood and school
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. When we live in the same place over a decade, we will feel more secure as everyting that we are familiar with.
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, most
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 might prefer to live in familiar location, which is their comfort zone.
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, they do not need to waste their times to explore around. For examples: schools for kids, new resturants, shopping malls etc. On top of that,
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 might prefer to live in the
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 closed to parents. In chinese culture,
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 will arrange certain of gathering when they have any celebration or they might visit their parents more often. From cons perspective, we might not be able explore into different community. We might limit our chance to make new friends or neighbors.
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: Richmond is so-called "Little Hong Kong", which have many HongKonger live in
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. In Vancouver
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, which live with different
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, including Asian, non-Asian. It might give us a chance to make new friends and understand their culture via communication. In conculsion, considering living close to where they were born, which is absolute right or wrong answer.
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 consideration where we place is a personal decisions. In my perspective, I prefer to live in a place that I am familiar with as there is full of my memories and surrounding by my parents and neighborhood.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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