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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job. Give some details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir/Madam, Hello, I wish everything could be all right. I am writing
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 letter because I saw an advertisement on the paper sheet, and know you need a babysitter to take after of your kid for six months, so I wanted to get
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 job because I majored in nursing at university.
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, when I was a student at university, I lived with my classmate who had a three-year-old boy and usually I had to take after her baby.
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, I have some experience in
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 job. I was a teacher in the kinder garden because I have the qualifications to train children.
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, I studied nursing but I can play the piano, do exercise in the swimming pool and speak France and Spanish, so in six months I am going to teach these activities to your child if you wanted. In my leisure time, I spend time watching films and series or reading books. sometimes I go to the park for walking or go to the swimming pool for exercising. If there are other questions, please call me. Faithfully, Mozhde Zand.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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