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Topic 3: the best way to resolve significant environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#topic #cost #fuel
Increasing the price of
fuel
 is the best way to decrease significant environmental problems. I totally disagree with
this
 idea. I do not think the high price for
fuel
 is so useful to use less.
This
 idea has some disadvantages.
First
 of all, governments should tell or show the truth about environmental issues around the world. While
people
 do not know about solving tasks to save our environment, they can't do anything.
For instance
, the government should advertise hybrid
cars
instead
 of
fuel
cars
.
This
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These
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 is 2 benefits which are air fresh with hybrid
cars
, a clean environment, and good bodies.
Secondly
, the cost of
fuel
 has so negative effects on
people
 and society. Some groups of
people
 can not buy because they do not have enough money-earning. In
this
 situation, there is not any choice but to do anything.
For example
, poor
people
 should buy gospel
cars
 to move around the cities.
Also
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 some public transportations should work with gas.
This
 is a one and just idea.
For example
, Buses work with
fuel
 and most
people
 use them to go somewhere during the day. In general, In my ,view we have other steps to save our environmental issues
such
 as hybrid
cars
 that I mentioned in the 2 previous paragraphs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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