Topic 3: the best way to resolve significant environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Increasing the price of
fuel
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is the best way to decrease significant environmental problems. I totally disagree with
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idea. I do not think the high price
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fuel
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is so useful to use less.
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idea has some disadvantages. First of all, governments should tell or show the truth about environmental issues around the world.
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people
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do not know about solving tasks to save our environment, they can't do anything.
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, the government should advertise hybrid
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instead
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of
fuel
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cars
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is
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2 benefits which are air
fresh
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freshened
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with hybrid
cars
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, a clean environment, and good bodies.
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, the cost of
fuel
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has so negative effects on
people
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and society. Some groups of
people
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can not buy because they do not have enough
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. In
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situation, there is
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choice but to do anything.
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, poor
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should buy gospel
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to move around the cities.
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some public
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should work with gas.
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is a one and just idea.
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, Buses work with
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and most
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use them to go somewhere during the day. In general, In my ,view we have other steps to save our environmental issues
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as hybrid
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that I mentioned in the 2 previous paragraphs.

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task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your disagreement but could benefit from a more detailed outline of your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to help guide the reader through your argument.
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Try to provide more specific examples or relevant statistics to strengthen your arguments and make them more persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the conclusion summarizes your main points without introducing new ideas for clarity.
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You express a clear opinion throughout the essay, which is important for task achievement.
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You make a commendable effort to discuss the socioeconomic effects of fuel prices, which adds depth to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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