some people say that I young person should spend a time building us successful career others think their spending time with friends and families more important discuss both views and give your opinion.

As the world is changing day by day and the labouring market is becoming more and more competitive, many

people

firmly believe that youngsters had better focus on developing their future jobs whereas others consider spending

time

on social activities with friends and relatives is more vital. Personally, I think each choice has its own benefits and drawbacks which I'm going to mention in

this

essay.

To begin

with

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nurturing

successful

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career, it's apparent that money is the top priority of many

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students who are ambitious and enthusiastic when they decide to take a job. Those students never feel satisfied with their achievements since they will always improve and train their

skills

to meet the requirements of strict employers as well as some grumpy consumers.

Therefore

,

such

employees keep thinking that it's a waste of

time

to use their free

time

for recreational activities so they pay more attention to

learn

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and try to expand their knowledge as much as they can.

This

will brings young

people

a whole of benefits including: well-paid jobs, fame and

high

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living standard. They

also

could become

a

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prestigious and creditable in their families as well.

However

, those employees may

lost

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lose

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some important life

skills

that

is

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a need in some hard situations. They may not have essential survival

skills

or they are even unable to cook for themselves or do the laundry. These problems will cause a lot of negative influences on their private lives. Turning to

spending

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time

with friends and families, many youngsters are sociable and active so

that

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they would rather hang out with their best friends on the weekends. They speculate that they may

lost

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lose

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their youth if they only work and work continually

everyday

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so they want to enjoy their free

time

with no restrictions. Those guys don't mind wasting a huge

time

just

to choose

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their

favour

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destination for their holidays,cost an arm and a leg to buy the clothes from popular brands or just simple as gathering with their parents and talking about their days. Those activities will provide young

people

with a number of communication

skills

which are really good to build up beneficial

realationship

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relationship

. They

also

own quite a variety of noble characteristics

for instance

honest

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, generosity, courage and a heart of gold.

Nevertheless

, those

yongsters

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youngsters

might not concentrate on their academic studies so that they can't get high salary work which can guarantee an

adquate

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adequate

living standard for them. To summarise, both ways of spending

time

are very beneficial

especially

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for young

people

who are energetic and full of hopes, but they should balance these two ways in order to get success in not only

career

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path but

also

social

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life.