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The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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In my opinion, students should be supported with any preferred
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 that they may choose, did you know that 56% of students aren't supported with their
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 could be a major problem as it could lead to depression and stress. Doing a
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 would be less stressful,
fun
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 and convenient. A
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 of your
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 would be more convenient as it would help you reach your peak performance at work faster, you would be more active and you would reach your goals much faster than a
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 you wouldn't like,
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 working as a cashier when you want to be a chef is inconvenient and inefficient. Doing a
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 way more
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. Choosing a
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 you like would be a lot more
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 because you're enjoying it and it could give you a lot of good opportunities for the future, for ,example if you like the
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 you would work well and that would mean you could possibly get a raise faster and climb the ranks of your
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 faster. Having a
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 you like is
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 less stressful!. Having a
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 you like is less stressful because doing a hard
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 you don't like can lead to major stress and possibly depression,
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 can be very bad for your work performance and mental health,
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 can be easily fixed by taking a break from your
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 or quitting your
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 and finding a
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 you like and less stressful. In Conclusion, Having a
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 you like is more Convenient/Efficient,
fun
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 and less stressful. These are all major factors you might want to look into when you are Looking for Your Future
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