Some people believe that the experience children have before they go to school will have greatest effect on their life. Others argue that experience gained when they are teenager have a bigger influence. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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of individuals consider that the encounter that youngsters have during preschool age have a significant
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on their upcoming years.
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, others think that their
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influence
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on them. I believe that
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what children learn during the adolescence stage is what really matters because
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will either make or mar their later
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on their future believe that
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is the early part of their
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they have not started
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, they learn various things at home from parents, uncles as well as aunties.
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, they can virtually different right attitudes from the wrong ones.
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, they tend to synthesize almost every
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they come across and as they grow up with
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their later
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either positively or negatively. To exemplify, a boy who grew up with a father
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an adept smoker will by no means become a proficient smoker in his forthcoming years because he has already viewed
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habit as a good lifestyle and he is liable to die young
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of smoking.
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, other humans opined that children's
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during
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period greatly
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their future
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and l agree with
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period, they do not only learn from their biological parents
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encounter other people
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as
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friends and casual acquaintances. On top of
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, they mingle with
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school mates
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in their various
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. It is worthy to know that
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individuals can easily
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adolescents
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life
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, a study carried out by four Nigerian Scientists concluded that 80% of juvenile deliquescence
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as alcoholism, rape, and smoking emanate from peer group
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, they have the right to make a better
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for their
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at
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stage.
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, a person who wants to become a doctor or Nurse in the future fully
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that he or she needs to study well in order to achieve his or her ambition. In view of
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, l believe, the adolescence period has an enormous
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the upcoming years of the young ones. In conclusion, while some scholars agree that the
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youngsters have before attending
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a considerable
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on them, l believe that what children encounter as teenagers greatly
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impact
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them in time to come.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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