Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Due to globalization, migration of families to other
countries
is gradually increasing for better Correct your spelling
lifestyle
life style
, Correct your spelling
lifestyle
education
, or employment. Some people claim that immigration will leads
to more challenges Change the verb form
lead
to
the Change preposition
for
children
in these families; however
, in my perspective migrated children
have more advantages, in the below paragraphs, I explain both views.
On the one hand, one cannot deny that immigaration
to a new country is a difficult situation for Correct your spelling
immigration
children
as it distract
their Change the verb form
distracts
education
and lose
local friends. Change the verb form
loses
First
and foremost, when parents migrate to oveseas
their kids Correct your spelling
overseas
has
to stop Change the verb form
have
education
in a home country and switch to a new school that
leads to Correct pronoun usage
apply
a greater consequences
as the Correct the article-noun agreement
greater consequences
a greater consequence
students
are not aware of a new syllabus and curriculum, it takes a lot of time and energy to adjust to a new school environment. In addition
to education
, youth feel homesick as they miss local friends and not
able to make Add a missing verb
are not
a
new friends Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
immediatly
in a new place due to barriers like cultures, languages and traditions. Correct your spelling
immediately
Thus
, migration is challenging to adjust to a new
Correct the article-noun agreement
new education systems
a new education system
education
systems and difficult to make fresh friendships.
On the other hand
, migrating to developed countries
comes up with benefits like better education
and more job opportunities. To begin
with, many developed countries
across the globe provide free education
which helps this kids
to study courses of their desire without worrying about Change the determiner
this kid
these kids
financial
Add an article
the financial
burden
. Fix the agreement mistake
burdens
For instance
, the Canada
government provides better and free Replace the word
Canadian
education
for all children
irrespective of their parents
financial situation. Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
Besides
education
, job
market in developed Add an article
the job
countries
is always open for everyone so such
overseas students
can easily grap
an employment opportunity. Correct your spelling
grab
grasp
Thus
, overseas students
have a scope to learn for no fees and wide
variety of job opportunities.
Add an article
a wide
Finally
, to racpitulate
, Correct your spelling
recapitulate
number
of families migrating to a new country is significantly increasing, Change the article
the number
Although
some people claim immigrant students
life will be a more difficult due to Change noun form
students'
student's
a new
Correct the article-noun agreement
a new education system
new education systems
education
systems and culture; nevertheless
, In my opinion, eventually, kids adjust to an environment so must consider longterm the aforementioned overseas student benefits like better education
and employment opportunities.Submitted by rana
on
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