Old people get bored after retirement. Explain the causes and solutions.

The elderly usually feel bored after they are retired. The main reason for
this
is that after leaving work they have much more free
time
and do not know how to spend it. A viable solution is to
organise
special meetings for the old
people
, where they can share their interests and do something
that is
in common for all of them. After working hard all their lives,
people
in their 60s retire and usually cannot understand what to do in the morning, where to go in the afternoon and how to spend the evening. Obviously,
this
great difference between completely different lives is the main cause of the problem. After busy working days
during
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several
decades
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you are free for the rest of your life.
For instance
, in 2020 Cambridge University conducted a research on why old
people
get bored. The result was surprising and simple at the same
time
. They just do not know how to
organise
their
time
. A possible solution to
this
difficult situation can be arranging meetings and clubs for
people
over 60.
The retirement
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is the best
time
to start communicating more with other
people
, to develop skills that you could not develop earlier because of lack of
time
.
Such
clubs can create new
friendship
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friendships
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, improve
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the relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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between
people
and make them feel necessary for
the
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society.
For example
, there is a local orchestra in my town. It consists of
people
who have already retired. They are
amators
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amateurs
, but they successfully give concerts twice or more times per year. They can even raise money for charity
selling
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tickets to their concerts. I believe
this
is a truly wonderful way to spend your
time
after retirement. In conclusion, some
people
who are 60 or more find their life boring after leaving work. The reason is that these
people
are used to living
busy
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life and cannot
organise
properly their
time
for there is too much of it
comparing
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to their previous lives. And the great solution would be to
organise
clubs for elderly
people
where they could do things that they like together, talk to each other and feel happy.
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