Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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like other people, need to work hard to survive on the income they receive from selling their
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. Some kinds of artists achieve success very fast, charging a lot of money for their products or work, some of them try hard for
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long term ,
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a lot of defeats before becoming popular. Several got their recognition after death (
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Vincent van Gogh ) while most never reached success and
nobody
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knew them. Unfortunately, I think that the
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can do nothing about it. Usually, people prefer to pay for things that they admire and would like to own. If we are talking about pictures, the price will
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on
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of the author, how many times his\her
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were
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, in what genre and how
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works
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were rated. In the free market, because most
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are somehow unique, the
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can’t take part in price regulation.
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applies to other branches of art
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as sculptures, literature and music. Everybody can ask the price for their work as they want. Unfortunately, for the most
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nowadays artists shall be businessmen to promote their
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. And they need to keep an eye on the market to understand
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and take responsibility
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hands. In my
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is
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not many ways how
government
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can help unknown creators.
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government
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can help with
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of charity
exhibition
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or fairs to force
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of infamies
creative
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people. In
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I can say that
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question isn't as easy as many may think at
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. And probably has more non-standard or even unexpected variations of solution. But
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government
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the government
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doesn’t need to engage in
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of a free market. Creators shall find new ways of their representation.
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