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while some keep pets for personal pleasure and other purpose , other feel that it is a selfish decision. discuss both the views and give your opinon.

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Crazy for keeping
pets
 increases day by day. Some public believe that having a
pet
 at
home
 gives us happiness while others deny
this
 trend. Every individual has their opinion based on their interest. I will articulate both perspectives in subsequent paragraphs and will give my opinion at the end. On the one hand, there are some reasons why
people
 say that keeping
pets
 at the
home
 for personal pleasure.
Firstly
, nowadays some individuals live in a nuclear family and they want to get a dog or cat as a
pet
 in a
home
 as a new member.
Secondly
 , some want
pets
 to get out of their stress and worries from day-to-day life. So, that dog would give company to their owner.
Additionally
,
pet
-like a dog is always loyal to their owner and save our
house
 from thieves. According to a survey by the Hindustan times, 40% of the
house
 in India keeps
pets
 as family members.
On the other hand
, some
people
 advocate that having a
pet
 in a
house
 is a selfish decision. The
first
 and foremost reason is that a lot of money is required for
pets
.
People
 in middle-class families cannot afford it while only rich
people
 can afford the expenses of
pets
.
Secondly
,
pets
 need constant attention from their owner. If all family members in the housework
then
 no one is at
home
 to take care of a
pet
.
Also
,
pets
 are required for proper cleaning ad training. In the end, in my ,opinion keeping
pets
 at the
home
 , lie dogs , they are loveable and loyal to their owners. If a person keeps a cat at the
home
 so that the
house
 can get rid of mice. In conclusion, it is evident from all discussions that both the arguments carry equal strength and neither can be refuted outright. Having a
pet
 gives us pleasure and there are some drawbacks
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