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Some people think the main benefit of international cooperation is in protection of the environment while others think that the main benefit is in world business Discuss both views and give your opinion

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International collaboration is not a recent development in
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mordern
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 era, It's origin cannot be
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ascertained.
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, while some people are of the opinion that the main significance of
such
cooperation
 is to ensure environmental protection others opine that
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 major benefit lies in international trade. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views and make my opinion known. Environmental protection is essential to every nation
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 the globe and
this
 led to the need for
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 alliance. The practice of preserving
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nature, the climate, wildlife and the
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greenhouse
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green house
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 effect of gas emissions is not peculiar to any nation . Each country has a national regulation to protect
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 environment but individual national regulation is insufficient
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 because the activities of neighbouring countries have a significant influence.
Hence
 international
cooperation
 is very important for
nations
 to have similar rules and regulations to help preserve the ecosystem of the various
nations
. The significance of international
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 cannot be overemphasized in the global business world. The
cooperation
 between developed and developing
nations
 to guard against trade discrimination and ensure equal national market access has given each nation equal privilege to export and import goods and services, thereby
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 economic growth for all. The market access from other countries across the globe has led to investment by individuals and companies in developing
nations
. Moreso underdeveloped
nations
 have access to loans from
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 bank for national development. In my
opinion
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 one of the benefits of international
cooperation
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 environmental protection but world trade has the most significant advantage.

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