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A group of people believe that smoking in the public should be banned. Other groups of people argue that it should not. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some folks tend to support the prohibition of smoking publicly, while others are inclined to oppose
this
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idea
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. These dissents are common to appear
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 since we live in a diverse society consisting of
smokers
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 and non-
smokers
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. For some reason, both views might have their own stances. The main reason for those who support forbidding
smokers
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 from smoking publicly can be attributed to
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health
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issues
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. Breathing among
smokers
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 can be harmful to some people, because it can cause respiratory problems,
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 as cough and lung cancer.
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, they opt for a restriction or even
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 on smoking in the public
area
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 to avert long-term
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issues
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health
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issues
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.
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, other people might reject the proposal for banning
smokers
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 from smoking publicly due to human
right
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 reason. Smoking is an individual
right
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,
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 prohibiting someone from smoking in an open
area
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 would be undermined the basic
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 of human
right
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: the
right
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 to choose. Not to mention, a public
area
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 is a place for anybody, without discriminating between
smokers
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 and non-
smokers
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.
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, the
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 of opposing the outdoor smoking
ban
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 cannot accede to the realm of human rights. Given there is a greater menace from smoking outdoor, my stance would go toward supporting the
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 to devise a regulation to forbid smoking in public areas.
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, the
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 can
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 consider building some private spaces in public areas to facilitate smoker smoking. If so, the non-
smokers
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 will feel more comfortable doing activities in the public
area
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, while the
smokers
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also
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 enjoy smoking. In conclusion, those who support the smoking
ban
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 in public spaces might be worried about
health
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issues
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 caused by
smokers
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. On the other side, those who oppose that
idea
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 usually reject the discrimination against
smokers
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’ human
right
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 to smoke publicly. In my opinion, the
government
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 should
ban
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 activity considering the potential of spawning
health
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issues
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.
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, as suggested, the
government
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 can consider creating some private buildings to accommodate
smokers
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 smoking in the outdoor
area
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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