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Some people think that living in a country is essential to learn that country’s language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #country #country’s #language #culture
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The
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 gives us the information about the
Bulgarians
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 citizen emigration in 2001 and 2006 and the reasons for
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 decision. Most
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 aged between 15-60 had no intention to move abroad for travelling or staying abroad in the
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 2006 with 73 per
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 and in the
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 2001 statistic from the
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 shows a similar situation with a small difference going down only to 3 per
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 (70 per
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) of the same
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 of the population. Ten per
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 of the
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 from Bulgaria aged 15-60 travelled to other countries as visitors in the
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 2001 ,
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 just 6 per
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 from the similar
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 of the Bulgarian society had the same intention in the
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 2006. according to the
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 just nine per
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 of the
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 group 15-60 age who live in Bulgaria moved abroad to live for a short time in the 2006
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 while in the 2001
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 only 5 per
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 went outside for the same reason. Another intention of the Bulgarian emigration which was in 2006 is to work abroad and
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 return with 4 per
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 from
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 aged 15-60 while in 2001 the percentage is higher with 3 per
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 (7 per
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). In the
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 of
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 intending to live abroad permanently the
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 shows the same percentage in both years with 8 per
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. In general, the higher
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 in the
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 2001 and in the
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 2006 was the
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 with no intentions to go abroad and the lowest
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 in 2001 were
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 who lived abroad for short time and in 2006
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 who went abroad to work and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • acquisition
  • nuances
  • idiomatic expressions
  • context
  • global connectivity
  • cultural programs
  • media consumption
  • firsthand experience
  • frequent opportunities
  • substantial understanding
  • cultural shock
  • alternative methods
  • viable options
  • natural interaction
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