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Some people think that living in a country is essential to learn that country’s language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
chart
 gives us the information about the
Bulgarians
 citizen emigration in 2001 and 2006 and the reasons for
such
 decision. Most
Bulgarians
 aged between 15-60 had no intention to move abroad for travelling or staying abroad in the
year
 2006 with 73 per
cent
 and in the
year
 2001 statistic from the
chart
 shows a similar situation with a small difference going down only to 3 per
cent
 (70 per
cent
) of the same
category
 of the population. Ten per
cent
 of the
people
 from Bulgaria aged 15-60 travelled to other countries as visitors in the
year
 2001 ,
However
 just 6 per
cent
 from the similar
category
 of the Bulgarian society had the same intention in the
year
 2006. according to the
chart
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 just nine per
cent
 of the
people
 group 15-60 age who live in Bulgaria moved abroad to live for a short time in the 2006
year
 while in the 2001
year
 only 5 per
cent
 went outside for the same reason. Another intention of the Bulgarian emigration which was in 2006 is to work abroad and
then
 return with 4 per
cent
 from
people
 aged 15-60 while in 2001 the percentage is higher with 3 per
cent
 (7 per
cent
). In the
category
 of
people
 intending to live abroad permanently the
chart
 shows the same percentage in both years with 8 per
cent
. In general, the higher
category
 in the
year
 2001 and in the
year
 2006 was the
Bulgarians
 with no intentions to go abroad and the lowest
category
 in 2001 were
people
 who lived abroad for short time and in 2006
Bulgarians
 who went abroad to work and
then
 return.
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