Wealthy countries should acceptor refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what do you agree or disagree?

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Insecurity and terrorism is increasing at an alarming rate in some
countries
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recently leading to a sharp rise in the number of
refugees
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in these
countries
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. Developed
countries
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should welcome
such
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individuals and cater for their domestic needs for
humanity
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sake and because they will be of great value to the
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with , every human has the right to life.
Refugees
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are human beings and should be given the privilege to live when they are displaced from their natural environment.
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In northern Nigeria where
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have attacked some towns and the residents sought refuge in neighbouring
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. They should be welcomed and taken care of for
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sake because they have
right
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to life. Every human has a right to live and for
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they should be accepted by
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capable of supplying their needs. Moreso, when fully acclimatized
refugees
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can be of immense
benefits
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to rich
countries
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. Taking china
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acceptance of Ukrainian
refugees
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due to the ongoing Russian invasion has led to an increase in the Chinese workforce .
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, the technological advancement in the
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refugees
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refugee's
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home
country
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can be brought to the new
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leading to technological
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and advancement. In conclusion, I agree with the opinion that rich
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should accept
refugees
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for
humanity
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sake and because they can be of immense
benefits
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to the new
country
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