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over population of urban areas has lead to numerous problems. identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals tackle these problems.

#population #areas #two #ones #government #individuals
There is no doubt that these days, several of the countries have
a
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such
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many
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 trouble into
societies
this
 is more
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complicated
 to the government. The question is over
society
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the society
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 of urban areas has
command
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to many issues. Recognize one or two serious ones and propose ways that government and persons tackle these issues. In
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 I am going to discuss my opinion. In terms of problems, there
is
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 more troubles in
this
 world with
this
pandamic
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pandemic
 people can not comfortable because if they go
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outside
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out side
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 it might be the virus move to them. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that
Indiean
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Indian
 people who
is
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 having
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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 in the
second
 the Egyptian
communties
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communities
they
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have
over population
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overpopulation
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 too.
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, we have many populations around the world and can not stamina these amount of
communties
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communities
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not
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no
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 what it
happyning
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happening
 in the future,
however
 it might
be explode
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 in the future. ,
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, as far as I
know
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 the foods decline these days, with high coast it makes
a
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 individual is careful about food.
On the other
hand
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 it should be
penlizing
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penalizing
 these
societies
 who waste food for views
in
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especially
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in
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 Tik Tok. To sum up,
although
 with
over population
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overpopulation
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 I can see it more trouble than I thought the
governement
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government
 could not do
any thing
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 about
this
 issues,
this
 trouble it back for
societies
 to keep pushing kids in streets.
Therefore
 , I believe that to penlize who did not
orgnaize
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organize
 with
decision
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 of
government
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the government
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 to put him away from
world
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 it should
be do
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this
 for
societies
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