Write about the following topic. With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

In
this
technical era, everyone
busy
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in
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their hectic schedule. They have no time for their family even
some
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if some
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people live out of the state or nation. They have no time for the elderly masses. I will discuss my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs and I will
also
discuss how can
it
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be managed. To commence with, The increasing ratio of older people can be more burden on society. Because the
government
has to spend more
money
to take care of them they have to generate more funds for the medicine and the daily needs of the oldest people.
For example
, The
government
gives them
money
as a pension. Due to
this
, the youngster feels pressure because they have to pay more
money
as a face of tax
that
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is why they do not cope with them. Moving
further
, The masses have to save
money
for old
age
. Because, when they are in old
age
than
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then
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they can utilize that
money
for the
fulfill
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their basic needs and for the health treatment.
Hence
, In
future
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they do not depend on others they their life in on way and live an independent life.
For instance
, The
government
cut some salaries of the
government
employers and when they retire from their job
then
the
government
give them that
money
as a
funds
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. With the help of
this
money
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they live their entire life as a
self dependent
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. To conclude, The
government
has to make a strict policy to manage
this
. they have to get
money
from everyone as
a
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an
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old
age
tax and due to
this
money
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they can easily manage them without any problem or burden. because in old
age
they utilize our
money
not
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others. which they pay as
a
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an
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old
age
tax.
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