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Learning about the past has no valve for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With advanced involvement in
the
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technology these days. It
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 that obtaining historical knowledge from previous events has no benefit to humankind nowadays. I strongly disagree with
this
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 examples below.
To begin
 with, there are many approaches to prevent negative effects
in
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the
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society. To put it more simply, in many countries the precautions
of
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 natural disasters are highly developed
as a result
 of heartbreaking experiences from the previous events.
However
, there
are
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also
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 of nuclear weapons in case of war to combat opponents.
Furthermore
, historians
makes
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 history a pivotal and interesting thing. Many solutions to most diseases nowadays are
as
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a result of investigations done by historians. It would be an omission not to emphasize
on
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this
, years ago most
of
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the pregnant women that could not deliver themselves end up
life
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 after delivery struggles.
Hence
, that brought scientists, doctors, and many health workers together to find
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a solution
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solution
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 to the phenomenon.
However
,
Caesarean
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 section procedure was introduced into the health system for safe delivery. In respect to that,
this
 knowledge was acquired because of the documentation of the past event pertaining to
death
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 of pregnant women on the day of delivery. In conclusion, even with global technological advancements, it is essential to acquire knowledge from
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past occurrence in order to prevent future danger and for future improvement.
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