Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or the Antartic. What are the adavantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places

Nowadays, polar
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, many tourists are interested in travelling
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their stress. But unfortunately, most of them are facing so many problems while travelling into the Sahra desert and the
Antartic
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Antarctic
regions
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they are facing
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their trip.
Firstly
and foremost , undoubtfully, the sightseers face many problems during their visit, among all most important one is lack of medications. If they need urgent medical attention, there is no hospital and ll and
also
they are not that familiar with places. From another point of view, they
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a lot with lack of water and accommodation and
also
they compel to tolerate the climatic conditions over there.
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,
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to do their basic needs.
Secondly
, over the disappointing
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there are so many
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moments those ever before seeing anywhere.
for example
in the wilderness,
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camel travel and the sunset are most adorable experiences they never forget.
In addition
, the chilly freezing climates of the Antarctic
regions
also
provide very exciting moments. In conclusion, the hottest and coldest travel will provide so many beautiful moments to the visitors, that overcome the
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thing happening there.
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