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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the sahara desert or the Antartic. What are the adavantages and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places

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Nowadays, polar
regions
 and desert
regions
 are lower and higher extreme with temperature.
In addition
, many tourists are interested in travelling
towards
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 these
regions
 to
releasing
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 their stress. But unfortunately, most of them are facing so many problems while travelling into the Sahra desert and the
Antartic
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Antarctic
regions
. Here including points against the advantages and ,
disadvantages
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 they are facing
in
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 their trip.
Firstly
 and foremost , undoubtfully, the sightseers face many problems during their visit, among all most important one is lack of medications. If they need urgent medical attention, there is no hospital and ll and
also
 they are not that familiar with places. From another point of view, they
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 a lot with lack of water and accommodation and
also
 they compel to tolerate the climatic conditions over there.
However
,
they
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trouble
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facing
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 to do their basic needs.
Secondly
, over the disappointing
thing
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 there are so many
happiness
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 moments those ever before seeing anywhere.
for example
 in the wilderness,
the
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camel travel and the sunset are most adorable experiences they never forget.
In addition
, the chilly freezing climates of the Antarctic
regions
also
 provide very exciting moments. In conclusion, the hottest and coldest travel will provide so many beautiful moments to the visitors, that overcome the
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 thing happening there.
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