Countries become more developed due to the mix of different people and their culture. Do you agree or disagree?

During

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contemporary era,cultural diversity is prudent.Many

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and strong due to the blend of different

people

and their

culture

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assertion as multiculturalism lead to a peaceful

society

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to the new global market.

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are patient and

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society

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desire to learn and adapt to the new

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out the phenomenon of getting into the system which

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a good relationship with the member of the community and workforce

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give an organisation a new edge when opening a new market.

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research done by the University of Nairobi depicted that 80% of developed countries practice multiculturalism.

Therefore

mixed

culture

in a village is imperative since it is healthy and accurate in its productivity.

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background

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which may taint the

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substandard behaviors.

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research done by the University of Nairobi depicted that 80% of

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has

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policy to be adapted due to different

culture

.

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development of different

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and different way of doing

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can be detrimental

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practise

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. To sum up,

culture

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diversity is prudent as it brings

patient

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and

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reliance

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which increases

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of the

society

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,precaution is indispensable especially

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the new

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to practice what is in the line with the

culture

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