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More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

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There has been an increasing number of
people
 coming to
cities
 to seek a better life.
However
, living in the
cities
 may be a difficulty
to
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 many
people
, especially the newcomers and inexperienced ones.
This
 essay is going to point out problems that citizens have to cope with in urban areas and suggest some measures
need
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 to be taken by governments to improve the quality of urban life.
To begin
 with,
people
 coming to
cities
 are facing various issues.
Firstly
, the environment in urban areas is being heavily damaged
that
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which
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 may lead to serious health problems in
people
. The mushrooming of industrial factories and dense traffic
have
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 been the main cause of numerous kinds of pollution. The air quality is worsened by the emission of greenhouse gas from factories and cars
that
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which
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 is likely to result in respiratory diseases.
Secondly
, the cost of living in
cities
 is much higher than that in the villages or in rural areas. Inhabitants of
cities
 have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food.
Moreover
, finding a job is not always easy as the workforce is physically and skillfully demanding, while the employees are very competitive. There are many ways that governments can tackle these problems. The
first
 thing is that they can invest money
on
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 constructing more affordable
accomodation
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accommodation
 and social
building
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buildings
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 to reduce the cost of living.
Furthermore
, there is a need to limit the gas emitted from factories and the improvement of roads and public transport. Not only does it help to reduce pollution, but
also
address
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 the problem of traffic congestion.
Last
 but not least, politicians can increase the opportunities for jobs by opening more workshops or having job searching assistance offices. In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Metropolis
  • Rapid urban growth
  • Megacity
  • Urban sprawl
  • Housing affordability
  • Infrastructure development
  • Public transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Pollution
  • Noise pollution
  • Green spaces
  • Job market
  • Social cohesion
  • Community engagement
  • Safety measures
  • Crime prevention
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