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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are causes? And wat will be effects on society?

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The number of
students
 enrolling to
study
 a
science
course
 has been on the trough in some countries. Factors responsible for
this
 continuous trend and its societal implications will be discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, poor orientation to the
sciences
 is a major reason why
students
 don't want to
study
 them.
For example
 in Nigeria, there is a common myth that says only intelligent
students
 who are excellent in maths can do well in a
science
 subject . Wrong information like
this
 will only instil fear in the mind of
students
 interested in the
sciences
 and
this
 has led to many
students
 avoiding the
course
. Another significant factor contributing to
this
 situation is insufficient employment opportunities for
science
students
 in
such
 countries. Take
for
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 instance , a situation where graduates of
science
 subject are the most unemployed in the community , young people will prefer to
study
 a more lucrative
course
. The subsequent consequences of not studying the
sciences
 are innumerable . one is the delay in
science
 and technological advancement. There will be no development in the country and it will result in depending on other nations' scientific development. Two, the community will remain a burden to developed nations to supply its technological requirements.
This
 will involve spending a lot of money on importing technological devices from developed countries to optimize the quality of life for its citizens. In conclusion, inappropriate orientation to the
sciences
 and absence or reduced job privileges are some of the reasons why
students
 refuse to
study
 a
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science -related
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course
 while the societal implications are delayed development and being a burden to developed nations to meet
its
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 education and technological needs.

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