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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects. What are causes? And wat will be effects on society?

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The number of admission into a
science
course
 has been at the trough in some countries. Factors responsible for
this
 continuous trend and its societal implications will be discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, poor orientation to the sciences is a major reason why
students
 don't want to study them.
For example
 in Nigeria, there is a common myth that says only intelligent
students
 who are excellent in maths can do well in a
science
 discipline. Wrong information like
this
 will only instil fear in the mind of
students
 interested in the discipline and
this
 has led to many
students
 avoiding the
course
. Another significant factor contributing to
this
 situation is insufficient employment opportunities for
science
students
 in
such
 countries. Take
for
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 instance , a situation where graduates of the
science's
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sciences
science
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 are the most unemployed in the community , young people will prefer to study a more lucrative
course
. The subsequent effect of not studying the sciences
are
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 innumerable . one is the delay in scientific and technological advancement. There will be no development in the country and it will result in depending on other nations' scientific development. Two, the community will remain a burden to developed nations to supply their technological requirements.
This
 will involve spending a lot of money on importing technological devices from developed countries to optimize the quality of life for its citizens. In conclusion , inappropriate orientation to the
course
 and absence or reduced job privileges are some of the reasons why
students
 refuse to study a
science
-related subject while the societal implications are delayed development and being a burden to developed nations to meet their
science
 and technological needs.

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