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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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The demands and wishes of
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 about
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 have been heatedly debated for numerous years. These days, some individuals decide to become their own bosses, rather than being a labourer in a corporation or organisation. From my perspective,
people
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 do not want to be in a nine-to-five working system, and they wish to have a loose free time in their private life.
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, working independently has some drawbacks too.    
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 with, the number of individuals who want to prioritise their personal life over
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 is surging day by day.
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, they do not prefer to be in a job that pushes them to have a strict toiling schedule. More specifically, a person likes to spend time with themselves or their families and friends. In fact, one of my closest friends, Selin, resigned from her job as an architect in a company called Arcelik to be self-employed and be able to have more leisure time to herself.    
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, there are a few disadvantages of labouring as a self-employee. In one instance, these
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 do not have a precise monthly income as if they
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 for a corporation.
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, sometimes, their monthly payment may be less than their requirements, and they may even experience problems
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 the bills.
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, self-employed
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 have to deal with the legal bureaucracy by themselves.
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, these
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 have to give taxes that they do not require to pay if they
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 in a company. I believe
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 these problems are the main two withdraws.     In conclusion, while individuals pursue working as self-employed, they have some concerns about
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 income and taxes. I hope that
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to
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accomplish what they wish for whether it is to be a labourer in an organisation or be the boss of their own.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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