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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
It is argued by someone that increasing rate of internet shopping in urban areas in the future cause to closure retains and whole stores. I beg to differ with
this
 opinion in
this
 essay , and I will state the reasons for my view. Basically, not only shopping online offers great flexibility and more convenience for customers ,but
also
 the consumers could stay at home and buy their needs comfortable.
as a result
, they do not spend so much time in traffic for buying basic substances,
such
 as groceries , clothes and food.
However
, some human races and I have faith to going shopping and visiting local stores is a more reasonable method . the reason why
firstly
 they can see the good and check its quality when they buying ,
also
 the pictures used to advertise online is sometimes unreal and the reality of the products is a distinction from being shown. Due to the fact that the images are usually taken with high-quality cameras.
For instance
, my wife bought a blue shirt when we delivered it ,its colour was different from the advertisement .
In addition
, some folks do not truth the website and social media , because the number of advertisements is fake and fishing. they deceive their victims by attractive comments and circumstances to buy. I had a personal experience
last
 year, I decided to purchase a cellphone from Digi Kala my account bank was hacked by clicking its sending link. I would like to close
this
 argument,
although
 visual shopping is easy for consumers who prefer to stay at home and order their needs, some
people
 believe that it caused to close the of local shops . but another body and I believe that in going shopping could control the size, colour and another item .in shopping online may be your secret date be a hack. I recommended both service shops have to exist for
people
 with distinction views. I would like to close
this
 argument ,
although
 the rate of visual shopping is easy for consumers who prefer to stay at home and order their needs, some
people
 and I believe that in going shop could control the size, colour and another item
also
 in shopping online may be your secret date be a hack. I recommended both service shops have existed to
people
 with distinction views.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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