The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts provide information about the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and
amount
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the amount
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of time spent doing housework in
househelds
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households
in a country between 1920 and 2019. If we look at the graphs closely, we will notice that
,
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percentage
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the percentage
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of households with electrical appliances didn't
fell
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fall
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since 1920 except
washing
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for washing
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machine
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machines
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.
On the other hand
, housework hours didn't increase till 2019.
Regrigeratro
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Refrigerator
and
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaner using
amount
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the amount
an amount
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of percentage constantly growing. After 2000, both appliances
using
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used
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every
househelds
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households
household
until 2019, but only
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the refregerator
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refregerator
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refrigerator
met 100% from 1980. At the same time, in the graph, washing machines line something different.
Although
it is growing from 1920
but
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after that year it is decreasing till 1980 and after
that
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,that
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it is growing without falling
untill
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until
2019. In the
next
graph of
houseworks
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housework
per week
decreasign
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decreased
from 1920 to 1960 so fast, which is 50% to move at 20%. Even if after 1960 it is still falling,
but
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the amount was not huge.
Finally
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,Finally
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in 2019, the number of hours per week stand at 10%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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