The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide information about the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and
amount
of time spent doing housework in Correct article usage
the amount
househelds
in a country between 1920 and 2019.
If we look at the graphs closely, we will notice thatCorrect your spelling
households
,
Remove the comma
apply
percentage
of households with electrical appliances didn't Correct article usage
the percentage
fell
since 1920 except Wrong verb form
fall
washing
Change preposition
for washing
machine
. Fix the agreement mistake
machines
On the other hand
, housework hours didn't increase till 2019.
Regrigeratro
and Correct your spelling
Refrigerator
vaccum
cleaner using Correct your spelling
vacuum
amount
of percentage constantly growing. After 2000, both appliances Add an article
the amount
an amount
using
every Wrong verb form
used
househelds
until 2019, but only Correct your spelling
households
household
Correct article usage
the refregerator
refregerator
met 100% from 1980. At the same time, in the graph, washing machines line something different. Correct your spelling
refrigerator
Although
it is growing from 1920 but
after that year it is decreasing till 1980 and after Remove the conjunction
apply
that
it is growing without falling Add a comma
,that
untill
2019.
In the Correct your spelling
until
next
graph of houseworks
per week Correct your spelling
housework
decreasign
from 1920 to 1960 so fast, which is 50% to move at 20%. Even if after 1960 it is still falling, Correct your spelling
decreased
but
the amount was not huge. Correct word choice
apply
Finally
in 2019, the number of hours per week stand at 10%.Add a comma
,Finally
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