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The graph depicts the proportion of females who had given
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to their
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kid in different
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brackets from 1966 to 2006 in Australia. Overall, it is evident that the maximum number of
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was given in the
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1966 in the
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of 19 to 24 and the least was recorded in 1986 in the
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of 40 and more. Formerly, more ladies were pregnant when they were young ,
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in 2006 females preferred to give
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after the
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of 30. In 1966, 33% of the women became pregnant when they were in their teenage, while
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figure dropped considerably before reaching 11% in the
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2006.
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, ladies in the
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of 19 to 24 gave
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to twice more children in 1966.
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this
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group experienced the highest amount of births among them, it
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showed a significant decline in the four decades where it was noted at less than one-
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of
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.
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group of 25 to 30 experienced fluctuation in its time period, where the number of births
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increased in the
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two decades and reached 50% before falling to 28% in the
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2006. With the change in generation, more women preferred to get pregnant after the
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of 30. There was a drastic escalation in the proportion of giving
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. The number of females that gave
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has increased quadruplet from 12% to 48% in the
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2006. Even though
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a rise can
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of 34 to 39 ,
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it is less in comparison to the 30 to 34
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group.
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of ,40 a slight increase was noticed from 2% to 5%.
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