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Whilest a number of people assert that increasing in economic is the only solution to eliminate starving and poverty, others believe it will be demise the environment

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Whilst
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 a number of people assert that increasing in
economic
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 is the only solution to eliminate
starving
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 and poverty, others believe it will
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demise the environment. There are rational arguments on both
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 of
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 topic which will be discussed in detail, followed by my own take on the matter. On the one hand,there
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 reasoning that
economy
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 is the cornerstone of a flourishing nation and any development in
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 respect.
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 to say,
economy
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 is believed the
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 of importance in
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 of our life.
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 is amply illustrated by the fact that it provides the poor with the wealth and economic growth
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in
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 vital to
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rise
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raise
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employment
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.
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, another justification is that
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economic
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 is the most important sole way for raising job opportunities,
for
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 each individual in
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 nation can affordable their needs.
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, the opposing view
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 that making headway in
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cause
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 damage to
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. The more compelling reason for their assertion is that when it comes to
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 most specifically export we have to deteriorate
forest’s
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 trees and
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over
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exploitation.
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 in turn
exclude
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 various ecosystem and habitat. Take pollution is affected
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the air ,water and soil. Air is polluted by the emission co2 by
car
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.
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, using
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chemical
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 by industries cause
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 to animal
habitat
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habitats
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.
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,
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economic growth has a bad effect on
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nature life and
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 the earth.
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,in my opinion, in Canada , it is impossible to see
highly
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 rate of poverty or
hungery
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hunger
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 person without the required economic background.
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,
economic
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 would be important for
environment
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the environment
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. To conclude, there are valid arguments on
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both
side
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 of the controversy, economic growth requires the inferred of the government to
adress
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address
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