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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some experts believe that starting
learning
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 another
language
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 at
primary
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 level is better than at
secondary
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the secondary
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 level. I think the downside of
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 outweighs the upside because young pupils may have a great workload
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. On the one hand, young children are better
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 learners than older ones. Primary school-aged children are at an early stage of learning
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 and
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 tend to be very open to new ideas.
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 to say, they are less likely to find the different pronunciation and grammar of a foreign
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 strange and difficult to learn than their counterparts
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 secondary school.
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, I do not think
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 gives them a major advantage in life because many people have become successful, either professionally or financially, without mastering a
second
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language
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.
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, studying a new
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 at
primary
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 level can greatly increase young pupils’ workloads. One more
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 to learn means more classes to take and more schoolwork to do. Take China, where English is compulsory at all primary schools. Chinese pupils often spend about half an hour every weekday just on their English homework. And to outperform their peers, many of them enrol in weekend English classes. I think
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 puts young pupils at a great disadvantage because
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 their age, they should spend more time enjoying leisure activities rather than burying themselves in endless academic tasks. In conclusion,
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 primary school-aged children tend to be good at acquiring a foreign
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, I believe
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 advantage is far outweighed by the disadvantage of the heavy workloads that come with it.
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