The number of overweight children in developed countries is increasing. Some people think that it is due to problems such as the growing number of fast-food outlets. Others believed that parents are to blame for not looking after their children’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the
last
decade, exessive-weight children is
gradually increasing in developed countries. Some dieticians claim that one of the reasons is due to a rise Change the verb form
are
of
junk Change preposition
in
food
restaurants and others argued that parents neglect their children's health. I completely agree that expansion
of unhealthy Correct article usage
the expansion
food
stores are
the main cause as they are easily Correct subject-verb agreement
is
accessable
and Correct your spelling
accessible
cost effective
.
Add a hyphen
cost-effective
To begin
with, more number of
outlets Correct quantifier usage
apply
provides
Correct subject-verb agreement
provide
an
easy access to adolescents for preprocessed Remove the article
apply
food
. These outlets attract kids by their mouthwatering dishes, aroma, and advertisements. For example
, Subway is now expanded to every corner in India which drastically increased intake
of burgers, deep oil fries and so on. Correct article usage
the intake
Moreover
, increased
number of canteens leads to Correct article usage
an increased
regular
Correct article usage
the regular
consumtion
of processed Correct your spelling
consumption
food
which is directly link
to obesity in children. To explain Wrong verb form
linked
further
, These unhealthy products contain extra
amount of carbs, sugars and fatty oils which Add an article
the extra
an extra
demands
more exercise to burn them, but due to academics students do not have enough time for physical activities. Correct subject-verb agreement
demand
As a result
, additional fat stacks in a stomach that put on more weight in kids.
In addition
to that, commercial businesses offer promotions and discounted prices to attrack
adolescents. Discounted prices are Correct your spelling
attract
Add a hyphen
cost-effective
cost effective
compared to healthy Add a hyphen
cost-effective
food
option
due to which juveniles Fix the agreement mistake
options
inclined
toward buying packaged Add a missing verb
are inclined
food
. As an example, Dominos
new branch provides discount offers across the year for school-going students. Change noun form
Domino's
Dominos'
In addition
to offers, teenagers stop cooking their food
due to availability
of more restaurants, they pick up meals from Correct article usage
the availability
nearest
stores Correct article usage
the nearest
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
saves
some time for additional activities. Change the verb form
save
Thus
, fast-food
outlets are reasons for unhealthy eating habits that leads
to obesity.
Change the verb form
lead
Finally
, to reacpitulate
, Correct your spelling
recapitulate
Although
some people claim parents neglect their kids is a reason for overweight in them; however
, In my opinion, growing
number of junk-Add an article
a growing
food
stores is a major reason as it attracts adolescents by it
ads and promotions.Change the pronoun
its
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