Courses in music and art should be compulsory for student in high school. Do you agree or disagree with the idea.

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decade,

arts

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are becoming more popular in the world. The importance of art and music

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mandatory in high school

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apply

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was always debatable but now it is more controversial. I believe that

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would be more stimulated with extracurricular activities

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arts

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crafts

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, and dance and why

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accepting

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this

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notion and explained

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further

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. In fact,

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and music are not only giving entertainment but

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play a significant role in humans. Because

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brain

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the brain

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is being activated with extracurricular activities and improves the creativity in the students.

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, these days

crafts

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and composing are becoming a profession

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those are led to

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, innovation, and research. One clear example is that, if a person is having an interest in

arts

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then

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he could be more energetic and they can acquire anything in that area. Some public

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that if a student

having

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an extra activities

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then

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they can

be easily attract

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to distractions and might not be good at education. Actually,

education

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final goal is to generate more income.

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, studies

are not only give

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are not only given

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money but hobbies are

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becoming to generate money.

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, photography is

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art and now it is a profession

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earning a huge amount of

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profit

. Government should encourage to learn

crafts

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the

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early age. In conclusion,

arts

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and music are gifted actions, everybody can not achieve them.

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, in my point of view schooling system must encourage to go through in

crafts

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then

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students are being improved in that and it is led to improvement in academics

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