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Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because these is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumber. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that many people go to university rather than follow vocational training. While I agree that the population should graduate academic, I believe that we should
also
 encourage more people to qualify employees
such
 as electricians and plumbers.
On the other hand
, there is a variety of reasons why boys and girls should go to institutions. One reason is that graduating from a university help everyone to find a good job with high qualification.
As a result
, their income becomes better and they have a good life.
Therefore
, they can buy a comfortable house for themselves and have luxury travel on their holiday.
Furthermore
, they have many opportunities to promote their works.
For instance
, a huge empire business
such
 as Samsung where always seek well-candidates for manager position when student have just graduated from their academy. It is meaning that they can more opportunities in the future.
On the other hand
, more people
also
 should be encouraged to do professional work
such
 as electricians and plumbers.
Firstly
, vocationally-trained help labours who earn money sooner.
Hence
, when they earn themselves, they become more mature due to their life.
Secondly
,
such
 workers are vital when new buildings are constructed or when existing buildings have to be renovated or simply maintained. Indeed, in many countries, the permanent maintenance staff of skilled tradesmen is employed in hospitals, and museums, ensuring the safety of all who use the building. In conclusion,
although
 nobody can deny the need for studying at university, I certainly argue that vocational training roles are vital when many countries lack qualified workers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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