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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The pie charts depict the proportion of
land
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 under
forest
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 in South
America
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,
Africa
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, Asia, Europe and North
America
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 and the production of
timber
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 in each area. Overall, it is evident that
Africa
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 has the highest
forest
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 cover, whereas due to excessive population Asia has the least.
However
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, the maximum amount of
timber
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 is produced in North
America
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, irrespective of the largest
land
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 available for the
forest
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,
Africa
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 has the minimum
timber
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.
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Africa
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 has 27% of the
forest
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land
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,
timber
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 production is accounted for one-
third
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 of the
land
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 area.
On the other hand
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, with the least area available for
forest
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land
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 (14%), Asia has the double proportion of
timber
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 in comparison to
Africa
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.
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, only 16% of the
land
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 is under
forest
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 in South
America
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 and the percentage of
timber
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 produced is 23%. Taking into consideration Europe and North
America
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, together they accounted for 50% of the
timber
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 production( with 20% and 30% respectively).
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, only 18% of the
land
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 is covered by
forest
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 in Europe whereas one-fourth of North
America
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 is covered with
forest
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.
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