Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many attorneys have said the practice of preventing the jury to get information on
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criminal record of the defendant before reaching their verdict about the case should be dropped. Because human beings have the perception of
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when exposed to a similar situation in the future. Members of a jury are human beings like anyone else; they are prone to failures, to preconceptions, so the Justice system must
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innocent person can be condemned solely because she committed a crime in the past;
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more criminality. In conclusion, even though those who stand for more openness on information when it comes to criminal records of the accused, in good faith, thinking
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