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More and more people want to buy famous brands ofclothes, carsand other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The line graph depicts the proportion of US citizens who have seen cinema in different
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 who have visited the cinema are of the
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 15 to 24, the least percentage was recorded in the
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 of 35 and over. Taking into consideration the
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 of 15 to 24, in the
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 2000, only 15% of
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 attended cinemas,
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 figure showed a considerable increase till 2007 when the sales for tickets increased thrice, before falling to 38% and plateaued
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 for two years.
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, it again increased and reached the peak in the mid of the
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 2010, before declining.
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, a stable escalation was noticed in the
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 bracket of 35 and over where the percentage of
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 reaching the cinema was noted at 13% in 2011. Much fluctuation was experienced between 7 to 14 years of
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. Only 10% of
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 visited movie halls in the
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 2000,
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 showed projections throughout its phase and increased thrice by the end of 2011(at 30%).
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 the
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 brackets of 7 to 14 and 25 to 36 reached the same level in the
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 2011, an increasing fluctuating trend pattern was noticed from 2000 to 2011 in the
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