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Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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A considerable number of
products
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 are being imported and sold by the shopping
malls
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 from other countries rather than buying from it locally. I believe
this
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 method has several reasons,
such
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 as high profit,
range
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 of
products
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 and availability for the supermarkets, and benefits, namely
range
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 of the
product
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 for the customers, huge customer's crowd for the
malls
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.
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 with reasons, there are several factors behind purchasing the
product
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 from outside of the country
instead
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 of locally
for
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 the shopping centres. High profit is one of the primary reasons. The supermarkets tend to save billions of money, due to the low
product
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 cost, less currency rates and cheap labour from the other countries.
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,
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range
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the range
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 of
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product
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products
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 is a vital reason too. Because of
people
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's different tastes and expectations, shopping centres require
to import
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imports
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 from different countries that are not available
in
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apply
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local.
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, to
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fulfil
fullfil
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fulfil
 customers' needs and to earn high financial benefits, shopping centres have to focus more on importing international
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.
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, I believe the methodology of putting high importance on purchasing
products
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 from the outside country
instead
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 of the local has positive development.
Firstly
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, customers can get the benefit of a
range
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 of
products
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 at a low price. The shopping
malls
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 can only get different types of
products
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 at
cheaper
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a cheaper
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rate
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rates
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 from the outside of the country as a huge number of varieties cannot be produced locally and if it is been produced,
it
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they
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 could not be pocket friendly. A daily crowd of
people
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 is a core benefit too for the shopping markets as it cannot be denied that
variety
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a variety
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 of
products
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 can easily attract
people
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 with different tastes for shopping.
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, any supermarket can boost
their
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its
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 sales by selling not only
people
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's
choice
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choices
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 but
also
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 advertising other
products
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. In conclusion, high income and
people
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's different tastes are vital points for importing
maxium
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maximum
products
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 from around the world by the shopping
malls
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instead
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 buying it locally, which I think is a
postive
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positive
 change. The result of
this
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 is
benefit
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the benefit
a benefit
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 of a
range
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 of
products
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 to the
people
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 and
advantage
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the advantage
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 of a huge
customer's
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customer
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 crowd to the
malls
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.
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