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Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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A considerable number of
products
 are being imported and sold by the shopping
malls
 from other countries rather than buying from it locally. I believe
this
 method has several reasons,
such
 as high profit,
range
 of
products
 and availability for the supermarkets, and benefits, namely
range
 of the
product
 for the customers, huge customer's crowd for the
malls
.
To begin
 with reasons, there are several factors behind purchasing the
product
 from outside of the country
instead
 of locally
for
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 the shopping centres. High profit is one of the primary reasons. The supermarkets tend to save billions of money, due to the low
product
 cost, less currency rates and cheap labour from the other countries.
Secondly
,
range
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 of
product
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products
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 is a vital reason too. Because of
people
's different tastes and expectations, shopping centres require
to import
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imports
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 from different countries that are not available
in
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apply
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local.
Hence
, to
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fulfil
fullfil
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fulfil
 customers' needs and to earn high financial benefits, shopping centres have to focus more on importing international
products
.
Moreover
, I believe the methodology of putting high importance on purchasing
products
 from the outside country
instead
 of the local has positive development.
Firstly
, customers can get the benefit of a
range
 of
products
 at a low price. The shopping
malls
 can only get different types of
products
 at
cheaper
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rate
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rates
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 from the outside of the country as a huge number of varieties cannot be produced locally and if it is been produced,
it
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they
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 could not be pocket friendly. A daily crowd of
people
 is a core benefit too for the shopping markets as it cannot be denied that
variety
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a variety
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 of
products
 can easily attract
people
 with different tastes for shopping.
Thus
, any supermarket can boost
their
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its
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 sales by selling not only
people
's
choice
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choices
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 but
also
 advertising other
products
. In conclusion, high income and
people
's different tastes are vital points for importing
maxium
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maximum
products
 from around the world by the shopping
malls
instead
 buying it locally, which I think is a
postive
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positive
 change. The result of
this
 is
benefit
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the benefit
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 of a
range
 of
products
 to the
people
 and
advantage
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the advantage
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 of a huge
customer's
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customer
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 crowd to the
malls
.
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