Nowadays many people want to buy famous brands of cloth, cars and other items. what are the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Well, it becomes a trend that almost everyone desperately needs expensive things like clothes, cars and other valuable stuff. The main reason for
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symbol and get respect in society as well. I personally think that it creates
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impact on society by destroying the simplicity and honesty in the world which I will explain in
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paragraphs. On the one hand, living standards depend on the outfit which
people
carry while they are going somewhere. Mostly
people
judge others by their money
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polite and loyal
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them
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who are financially well
otherwise
, they always dominate the poor person.
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is belonged
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from
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a rich family
therefore
, everyone wants to try to impress him because they can get benefits from him .
On the other hand
, it is the main cause of the public
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self-centred. They spend most of their time
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their life comfortable rather than
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others.
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lose
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simplicity due to modernization, they
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in the hurry to grab the opportunity so that, they become rich. According to
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,90% of
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because they want comfortable life sometimes,
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don't care about the feelings of others. In conclusion,
although
the branded things are the need of the time,
people
should concentrate on their simplicity as well as kindness so, they can make
this
world better for all living beings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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