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What are the problem of increasing city size ? What is the solution?

#city #size
It is a fact that a majority of people leaving the rural
areas
 and moving to the urban
areas
. There are several reasons for
such
 a situation. There are two main causes of the problem
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career
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a career
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opportunity
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opportunities
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 and medical facilities. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both
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aspects in the ensuring paragraphs with possible solutions. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is
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 opportunity.
This
 is because every year number of students are moving to the
cities
 for studies.
However
, after the
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completion
compeletion
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competition
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, students get jobs and decide to live in the same city. By
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 I mean that, if they get job opportunities only in
cities
then
 they have to stay there.
This
 is the main reason
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increasing
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 population in
cities
.
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 solution would be
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government
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the government
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 should start new projects in rural
areas
 to recruit
the
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freshers. So that, it will give them hope for
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 future in their hometown. Another problem that needs to be considered is medical facilities. Due to
lack
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 of hospitals,
majority
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 of people
everyday
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 move to the
cities
 for the proper medication.
This
 is to say, a person who is suffering from cancer and
he
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decided to move
any
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 metro city for his treatment with their family.
Although
, For
this
 issue,
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 should have to establish new hospitals
between
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 two or more towns which have all medical facilities and all treatment is available for all
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 of
disease
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.
Thus
, to conclude the topic it can be
finally
 commented that availability sufficient hospitals in town for all kind of patients and good future opportunity for the students, will
definately
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definitely
 decrease the some of the population of the urban
areas
.
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