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‏The animal species are becoming extinct ‏due to human activities on land and in sea. What are the reasons and solutions?

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Animal
species
 are essential in the ecological balance. In
case
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the case
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 of extinct of some
animals
 kind,
this
 might
cause
 many problems. The reason behind the shortage of different kinds of
animals
 might vary as well as the results. Interacting with natural resources in a negative way is one of the main reasons that affect
animals
' habitat and safety. Long ago there were more forests than nowadays, but the population want more space to build their houses so some might cut off trees to build entire cities and some might even bury the sea. And all these deeds will
cause
 damage to many types of
animals
 that depend upon forests and seas to survive. Another reason is hunting. Some communities consider hunting
as
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essential in their life either to provide themselves with food, to protect their family or even for entertainment. All of these reasons are under one umbrella which is hunting will
cause
 shortages of animal
species
 if we will not consider some legislation. Many
species
 end just because of
this
 activity like some kind of birds and wild
animals
.
Although
 humankind can affect the environment with their activities still the Earth is in rapid change and some
species
 are extinct just because of
this
 change. An earthquake, tsunami, or even a volcano can
cause
 massive damage as well. So we cannot blame only society's actions. In general, all
species
 in the world play a very important role to create balance in the natural environment. On the one ,hand public's actions might
cause
 a huge impact on nature and
on the other hand
 nature to recover very quickly from
this
 distraction.
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