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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rahter than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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With COVID-19 the
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 environment has changed drastically with many individuals wanting to
work
 for themselves
instead
 of being part of a big organisation or company.
This
 essay will analyse how self-employment allows control of
ones
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 working hours as the main reason for
this
 and how many lack the skill set to be self-
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employed
 as the prominent drawback.
To begin
 with, being your own boss allows individuals to create working hours around their current life with their prior existing commitments which are paramount to
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fulfilling
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fulfilling
.
Therefore
,
this
 permits single working mothers or fathers to take care of their children while still earning a living. As many jobs require strict starting and finishing times which overlap with school timing, flexibility can be achieved by working independently,
thus
, making it possible to pick
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 drop their children
to
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 school or daycare.
Moreover
, having autonomy over
ones’
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 hours of
work
 makes it probable
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 a routine, and pick up hobbies, which are crucial for
workers
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 mental health leading to
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improvement
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improvement
 in their quality of
work
. To illustrate
this
 argument, a 2022 study conducted by Oxford University revealed that self-employment has allowed more than 2000 successful businesses to open up in the recent year.
However
, working for oneself is impossible for every individual as they
are lack
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 the skill set required to run a successful
business
. Since running
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one requires far more knowledge than simply knowing how to sell products, it requires the person to have
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adequate
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adequate
 knowledge of financial management, leadership skills and critical thinking, all of which are taught at university.
Therefore
, if those wanting to start a working
business
 do not have a degree in
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business
 management
then
 their efforts would be in vain.
Additionally
, the mental strain which comes along with being your own boss is often never taken into consideration, though it is a major contributing factor to self-employment. Those who are unable to handle
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stressful
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 regressions in their line of
work
 are improbable to succeed.
For instance
, a 2021 survey by Harvard showed that 70% of workers who quit their corporate jobs to be
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 have lost 80% of their revenue due to insufficient
business
 skills. To recapitulate, many workers currently working in massive organisations would prefer to switch to being their own boss due to the complete
contol
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control
 over their schedule. Though
this
 is
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alluring
allowing
 it is only possible if the individual has proper skills to run and maintain a
business
, if not
then
 it is
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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