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The graph illustrates a series of steps of how
sugar
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 is made from
sugar
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canes
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. As is shown clearly in the diagram, the manufacturing procedure comprises a total of 7 phases, from planting
canes
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 to drying and cooling
sugar
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.
Initially
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,
canes
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 are planted on farms, and after 12 to 18 months the
sugar
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canes
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 become mature. The following step is harvesting, and the
sugar
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canes
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 can be harvested by machines or farmers' hands.
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, the harvested
sugar
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canes
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 which are collected are crushed into
juice
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 by machines. Before the evaporating process,
sugar
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juice
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 is purified by limestone filters. The fifth stage is heating
sugar
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juice
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 in an evaporator, and
then
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 the
juice
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 will become
syrup
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 in the evaporators due to the high temperature. The
next
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 phase is to centrifuge the
syrup
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, before centrifuging,
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syrup
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the syrup
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 is transferred to centrifuge and
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 step is marked by separating
sugar
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 crystals from
syrup
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, in
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 way, the purity of
sugar
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 can be guaranteed.
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,
sugar
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 is dried and cooled in a large can.

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