We have a mixture of people from different cultures and ethnic groups in a country. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
These days every
country
provides extensive support for diversified culture as many people across the globe migrating
to other nations Wrong verb form
migrate
better
Change preposition
for better
lifestyle
.Individuals from Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
variety
of Add an article
a variety
cummunities
from different locations bring multiple cultures and traditions. Correct your spelling
communities
Although
some citizens oppose such
mixture
, In my opinion, it provides Correct article usage
a mixture
opportunity
to explore many cultures and share knowledge.
To commence with, when an area is filled with various Add an article
an opportunity
the opportunity
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ethnic
ethinc
groups and religions that provides an opportunity Correct your spelling
ethnic
to
locals to explore multiple traditions, food, and clothing. Change preposition
for
As each
community have Change preposition
Each
there
authentic dishes, outfits and Correct your spelling
their
custums
. Correct your spelling
customs
costumes
For instance
, India is a diversified country
because of various religions & cultures followed across the country
, indians
often wide variety of Change the capitalization
Indians
Correct your spelling
restaurants
restaturants
, different ethnic Correct your spelling
restaurants
wears
and in-house events. Fix the agreement mistake
wear
Besides
that, each country
have
distinct festivals celebrated in a unique way one must be lucky to participate Change the verb form
has
on
those activities. To illustrate, Diwali is famous in India, Change preposition
in
Kite
festival in China, and hallowen in western countries.
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the Kite
In addition
to exploration, one cannot deny that diversified associates improves
the architecture by adding their authentic skills Change the verb form
improve
on
modern infrastructure. Imaginably, different folks from different regions can construct Change preposition
to
a
ninth wonder by combing all eight wonders of the world. Change the article
the
Moreover
, it is an opportunity to learn a new language. For example
, most people in India speak more than three languages it
is possible due Correct pronoun usage
which
diversification
.
Change preposition
to diversification
Finally
, to reacapitulate
, Correct your spelling
recapitulate
mixture
of people in the same place have the aforementioned advantages Add an article
a mixture
the mixture
such
as which enable ability
to exchange authentic food, clothing and festivals between different society folks.Add an article
the ability
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...