Success is often measure by wealth and material belonging. Do you think wealth is best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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Traditionally, some communities across the globe measure success using many factors
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as wealth, health, and popularity. In my perspective, financial status is not a suitable parameter to gauge success. A successful
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is someone who achieves work-life balance and contributes to a social cause. To commence with, these days in search of wealth some people act like robots. To enlighten, some employees spend extended hours in the office and no
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for family and friends due to which they may earn extra income but
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their quality
time
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to live life.
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, As per a recent survey conducted by the Employment Welfare reveals that more than 75% of workers extend their working hours. Since they spend most of their
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in the workplace their older parents move to orphan homes as they need support with their daily routines with respect to medication, food and clothing.
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the end, these people may have financial assets but lose relationships.
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to work-life balance,
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successful
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a successfull
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successfull
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successful
person
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supports and
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social services. To explain
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, one cannot deny that donation to social services either in the form of money or
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is
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best service that human beings can do to their communities.
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Mr.
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Ambani is
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richest business
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in India, he has got no followers; his counterpart,
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Ratan Tata got a lot of followers as he donates 50% of his income to society and
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one of the reasons people call him
successful
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person
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.
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, supporting social
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rather
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selfish is
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a
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apply
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one of the qualities.
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, to recapitulate, Measuring success is a subjective topic each
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individual
indiviual
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individual
might have different criteria;
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, in my perspective, it is
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evaluated
based on
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the achievement
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of balanced life and behaviour towards supporting society.
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